I wrote this for a friend who recently learned that her grandpa had passed away. He was a wonderful man, and had just celebrated his 50th Wedding Anniversary. WOW. This poem was written in five minutes, and I swear I felt a presence writing it. I am very spiritual, and rarely have I had something like this happen, so I wanted to share.
In Remembrance
Climb into my world
See the love that pours from me now,
Away from the pain and the tired game
Called Life
Beauty wrapped itself around my heart
And took my body away
But I will not fade
I will not fade
I am waiting for you my dear
I am waiting
To show you the sky so clear
And the disappearance of fear
I am waiting for you my dear,
For you to hold my heart
With your beautiful grace,
Away from the sadness you face
Until then…..
Remember my love
And my warm embrace
Remember the young days,
And the dreams we chased,
Remember my hands
And my smiling face
Remember my heart
It shall hold your place
3 comments:
beautiful jacksON!
love you!
SO beautiful, Jack. What a great place to share your writings.
I love that you wrote it for a "friend". Silly girl. :)
This one troubles me a little... it starts out really strong, but then the middle three stanzas kind of jump off from the start, esp. this one with the really heavy end rhyme:
I am waiting for you my dear
I am waiting
To show you the sky so clear
And the disappearance of fear
The previous stanzas don't seem to be this jarring to me...
The next two stanzas aren't as blatant:
I am waiting for you my dear,
For you to hold my heart
With your beautiful grace,
Away from the sadness you face
Until then…..
Remember my love
And my warm embrace
Remember the young days,
And the dreams we chased,
Not too bad, but the last stanza here seems a little forced - the rhyme - was it?
Overall, a great moment! Nice writing, my friend! As you can guess, I liked the start and end much better than the middle:)
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